Re: Two kavitas from mahejabeen

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Sri Uday Bhaskar gAru, while in JB's bar, said:

> vennelA  (hick!), vashaMtaM  (hick!), cirugAlI
>
> I prasheekalaki nEshi kavulu (hick!) kossha nirvashanAlu
> sheppukuMshunnAru vAshu gArU.

But that's not an excuse, Doc!  You see,  mahejabeen's  second poem
doesn't  look  like a finished product to me.  It looks more like a
snapshot of a random page from her journal.   No doubt that the  imagery
is good. But they (the images) don't seem to fit togather.  Not yet,
atleast.  For instance, take a look at the second stanza of the second
poem.  It's so distracting. Why would one include it if one's really
interested in communicating a concrete idea?  What about the last stanza?

BTW, no more drinks for you this evening!

-Jagdish ( or, may be I am missing something here! ) Bisa

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